"Will they always cast such a spell?"
Edwarda and MC,
I found this entire vignette rather gratuitous:
"Last night the baby had a bad fever and woke at 3am not able to sleep. So I took her to the cool bath and let mom rest."
[I question the reason for the second sentence, and I wonder how many 'moms' would rather sleep when a small child has a fever severe enough to require a bath... but that's just crazy ole' me...]
"Sitting in the bath naked with such a small creature
whimpering in discomfort depending on me, gave me all kinds of strong feelings."
[Really, you were sitting in the bath naked with a fevered little Girl at 3am...while she "wimpered in discomfort, depending on [you]"... does it get any more gratuitous? Indeed it does not.]
"The kind, as men, we rarely talk about but share only within ourselves."
[Unless of course, in one of those 'rare' instances, one deems it necessary to broadcast, the presence of these 'strong feelings' via the internet...I think you should keep talking.]
"The secret private time, when everything is clear."
[The choice of the word 'secret' when a child is ill does without question, raise my eyebrows. But, what do I know...]
"As she calmed herself down and slowly accepted the cooling water being poured on her,"
[Why would one describe the cooling down of a feverish child in a bath this way...?
'being poured on her'
'she calmed herself down'
'slowly accepted'
-but, again...people can do whatever they want with their kids...whenever and however they want to...and they can surely talk about their children as much and as broad-bandedly as they like! That must be one of the Joys of Parenthood.]
"I felt a deep spiritual connectedness."
[...and it's nice that you've shared that with us all. What a moving description, contextually.]
"This was my baby, and she needed me."
Seems that she needs a specialist...but that's really none of my business, is it, sir...?
BTW, I would question the above comments, regardless of the gender of the author.
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