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To: jbe who wrote (137)5/29/1998 10:18:00 AM
From: Neenny  Read Replies (1) | Respond to of 2633
 
reply.....
jbe, does your critique reflect the leniency I begged for on the grammar thread? ~~~neenny~~~



To: jbe who wrote (137)5/30/1998 1:51:00 PM
From: Jack Clarke  Read Replies (1) | Respond to of 2633
 
jbe,

I have been watching these stories and agree with your comments. With regard to the dog story, I might have ended it with a bit of onomatopoeia instead of words about the gunshots, e.g.:

Click-click....BLAM.

Jack