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To: abuelita who wrote (5131)	8/15/2001 1:21:07 PM
From: Clappy	Read Replies (2) \| Respond to of 104191

I wish I could put words together as well as you or Polvie so I could adequately describe how wonderful it was out on the dinghy yesterday evening. I'd love to share it all with you so why don't I just give you the bare bones and you write the story? Are you kiddin'?! You did great! Felt like I was there. You describe things well. The only thing I do differently is get a little long winded. I get diarrea of the keyboard. Sometimes I go off on tangents trying to explain stuff that isn't even relevent to the story. It helps my mind wander but certainly makes it difficult to edit it back into some sort of sensible order. For instance, the football story that I printed here last week was actually much longer. By the time I finished editing it, I couldn't piece things back into a nice order. I over explained nearly everything. It's in effort to help myself to find more words to describe things. Not just the same 20 words over and over... The one thing I've been trying to do more of lately is to take extra steps in describing certain important things. To use your story as an example: - we motored out about 500 meters, turned off the engine, poured ourselves a dixie cup full of california chablis and drifted back into shore, then turned around and did it again. What is a dinghy? I know what it is, but never been inside one. (Been called one many times before though...<g>) Explain how big it is. Inflatable? You don't have to give dimensions. ie: It was just the perfect size boat for the two of us to snuggle together as we watched the seal pup display the exact same feeling of relaxation that we were experiencing as we watched him bask in the warm evening air. (My grammar sucks but you can probably understand what I'm talking about...) Your descriptions can say a few feelings at a time. Did you drift slowly? How long? I eat it up. Don't be afraid to give me too many details. How did it feel slicing through the calm water? Smooth? Smooth as what? Were the only ripples being formed in the water, caused by the salmon's powerful tails? If so, tell me that. Could you smell the salt water? Do you think that you will always associate the taste of that particular brand of chablis with that perfect evening? Eagles resting on the break water. That must have been amazing. You are lucky. - there was a slight haze and the top of Mt. Baker appeared to hang suspended in the sky That's perfect. How high is Mt. Baker? Does it reach heaven? Snow covered? it was so incredibly beautiful that I thought to myself "I'm going to have to pay for this somehow - it can't be free!" It's not free. But you paid for it by telling us about it. It's a small fee but certainly worth the trade off. Thanks for sharing it. We can see it now too because of you. -NatureBoy

To: abuelita who wrote (5131)	8/15/2001 2:16:02 PM
From: Mannie	Read Replies (2) \| Respond to of 104191

You painted a nice picture there, Rose. Sounds like it was wonderfully serene. Did you wake to thick fog this morning? We did, it is great....cool and moist to start the day, one can smell the ocean very clearly. A great morning to plant a tree. Scott

To: abuelita who wrote (5131)	8/15/2001 6:03:18 PM
From: elpolvo	Read Replies (1) \| Respond to of 104191

hoser- i almost fell asleep during "pay it forward" too but i was online at the same time so that kept me from dozing. i liked the message but did NOT like the movie... i thought the directing was AWFUL!!! the director kept showing close-up faces every 10 seconds and having the actors OVERACT so the viewer would GET IT. pretty condescending to the viewers, i thought. the directing just didn't leave any room for the viewer to participate with his/her own intelligence or feelings. thanks for sharing the dingy outing... great word pictures. i read a good book a few years ago for writers called, "writing down the bones" by natalie goldberg. you should listen to sarah and take the creative writing class, i'll bet it would be mucho fun. amazon.com - the water was as smooth as... sammy davis jr.'s left eye... (or was it his right?) <G> -carlos